Topic on Talk:York Silk

The Necro-Era: York joins the Crabs

After being obliterated by a rogue umpire in Season 14, the Baltimore Crabs identified a great opportunity to reach out to the rest of the league and prove how caring and respectful the carcinization process can be. They quickly scuttled into his open grave and retrieved his fireblasted remains, with the intention of bringing him back to life and spreading the good word of Crabs to the rest of the league.

This, predictably, went down like a lead balloon.

While the Crabs were a little upset to discover that most of the league does not appreciate grave-robbing a child and forcibly transforming them into a hideous crab-monster, more shell than man, haunted by the terrible things they saw in the Great Beyond and saddled with a blood debt for their unscheduled return, they felt that they did a good job. Sure, maybe his eyes are a little sunken and a little matte-black now, and sometimes he screams for hours at a time, but who doesn't? That's just the Crabs' way, baby.

(didnt know i needed to do this, sorry!)

Hello, I wanted to let you know that we see this entry has been added back to the wiki in exactly this form. You may not be familiar with our Help:Contribution Policies, please give them a read. You may also be interested in reading Help:Critiquing Proposals for ideas on how to receive feedback.

I'm taking your entry down again for two reasons. One, you received feedback from UnabashedlyRose that was fairly unambiguous. Your entry is being read as mean spirited, and you need to address that. At the admin level, we agree that this entry is mean spirited.

Two, you aren't going to get a lot of traction here posting an entry that has a high chance of antagonizing readers. This needs to be majorly rewritten to better align with existing lore for York Silk, as well as keeping in mind that while you may not directly reap the consequences of arguments stemming from a post like this, many other people will.

You need to make changes in alignment with the points made by UnabashedlyRose, or at least work with her to create a better entry. Posting this entry again without making any changes will result in a temporary ban.

The "grave robbing a child" is a little morose, and doesn't exactly line up with the aging stuff that was covered in the Moist Talker's section, plus I know there's been a pretty concentrated effort to get York aged up in lore, so I don't really want to pull us back to that.
I also want to be conscious of making the Crabs out to be the mustache twirling villains of the piece. The "how caring and respectful the carcinization process can be", "spreading the good word of Crabs to the rest of the league.", "forcibly transforming them into a hideous crab-monster" and "That's just the Crabs' way, baby." all come off as pretty mean-spirited towards the team, and aren't really in line with the rest of the Crabs Lore or with York's Lore.
I'd be happy to help you rewrite something if you want to make an addition to the page, but I'm not sure this is really something we want on the page in it's current form.