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get rid of the chuck tingle reference, pretty obviously? that alone would make it way less weird. then you'd still have a vaguely erotically coded few paragraphs but it wouldnt be tied so explicitly back into sex and it'd be less bad.
i've also made it pretty clear what my discomfort is? im not trying to write this character's lore for you, im saying what is here makes me uncomfortable and i'd like it to be changed. me stating my discomfort alone should be enough to be helpful and help you work out what needs to be changed